IETLS ESSAY PREPARATION- GRANOLLERS

The boradband is use to connected to internet. For this technology, there are a group of people called "broadband service provider and equipment" and they have a world leaders to meet each year.
Nowadays, there is a boradband called IPV4. However, soon it runs out and we have new broadband called IPV6. With this new technology, we can surf on internet faster, also we can watch television through a new system called IPTV. notwithstanding, we have to know how is it work, we need all the equipment and finally we need to keep maintaining these things. For this purpose, there are a business specialist in this.
Leaders of the world in this enterprise are joined to talk in San Diego California. They talked about the future protocols with the purpose of standarize to use of broadband in the main countries of the earth; like China, USA, France, among others. Mrs Gonzalez was the speaker of this group. She said that they estimated 500 millions of people have been connected to broadband in the world for now. But they calculated more than double people for 2015.

Finally, this report is about the meeting of the leaders of the broadband serice providers and equipment. They want to make protocols for hold up the service because they believe that it is important due to the users growth in broadband.

Correction :


 For this technology, there are a group of people called "broadband service provider and equipment" and they have a world leaders to meet each year. =  In this technology  work  a group of people called "broadband service provider and equipment" and they organise an event where the world leaders in this  filed meet each year.

Nowadays, there is a boradband called IPV4. However, soon it runs out and we have new broadband called IPV6. = Nowadays, there is a boradband called IPV4, However, soon it runs out and we will have new broadband called IPV6.

notwithstanding, we have to know how is it work, we need all the equipment and finally we need to keep maintaining these things.=We have to know how is it work notwithstanding , we need all the equipment and finally keep the maintance of  these things.

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notwithstanding

 preposition

/ˌnɑtwɪθˈstændɪŋ; ˌnɑtwɪðˈstændɪŋ/ 

(formal)

 

(also used following the noun it refers to) without being affected by something; despite somethingNotwithstanding some major financial problems, the school has had a successful year.The bad weather notwithstanding, the event was a great success._________________________________________________________________________

there are a business specialist in this.=there are  business specialists in this.

They talked about the future protocols with the purpose of standarize to use of broadband in the main countries of the earth; = They talked about the future protocols for the purpose of standarizing the use of broadband in the main countries of the earth;

But they calculated more than double people for 2015.= But they calculated  to double the amount of people in  2015.

They want to make protocols for hold up the service because they believe that it is important due to the users growth in broadband.= They want to make protocols for holding up the service,  because they believe that it is important due to the users' growth in broadband.